A BONUS
Dear Writers,
Here’s a chance to celebrate the work of your peers–specifically the videos we didn’t get to view in person together (a goodly number of these exceeded the 3-4 minute mark, so we get crunched on time).
However, here’s what we can do to make things right AND help ourselves to a little bonus:
1.Watch the remaining videos from JOURNAL 10.
2.Comment on 2 things you really appreciated about each video. Address your fellow writers by name–that’s how real writers roll.
3.Do so by 11:59pm on Friday, Dec. 9 and earn a one point bonus on your artist’s book project.
4 thoughts on “A BONUS”
Bridget, I really appreciated your title page. I loved how it works with the overall feeling and theme of your story, from what we read in class. Another thing I appreciated from your book was the inclusion of the Spotify codes of songs that you felt like fit the story. I think that aspect added something different that we hadn’t seen before.
Kit, I really like the set up of your book. I loved how you made it look like you were looking inside the ant hill. I also really appreciated the inclusion of a poem for this artists book, instead of just putting the text in the book.
Sophie, I liked how you made the book feel like it was set within the home. Giving the feeling of where our main character spent all of her time. I also really appreciated how you created the rabbit page breaks within the book. It was something different from what I’ve seen for page breaks, but also added something really cool to the visual aspect of the book.
Cole, I really liked how you made this video different from everyone else approach. I like how you are creating this character to be review your story. It gave a different approach to reviewing your book, but we still can see exactly what you did for the book. I also really liked the story board aspect you chose for the book. It fits the theme of your story but still shows exactly what the story is about.
Scott, I really appreciated how you picked small aspects of the story to create a background of what the story is going to be about. And how you added them to his keychain, which was a critical aspect of the story. I also really liked how much you highlighted the relationship between Boston and his father, and how impactful that was to not only the story itself but to Boston as a character.
Teresa, I really like the representation of the blue eyes throughout the entire story. It shows how important it is to our main character and how much influence it has on the book itself. I also liked your use of colored papers to signify specific situations in the story, gives us a glimpse into the characters and what they meant to the story as a whole.
Bridget! I was so happy to see that you chose to do this story for your artist book, I loved it the first time I read it and I still love it hearing it again, especially in this form. One thing I really liked about your story was the images and stickers that you incorporated throughout the story. I think that this was a very creative way to get us to visualize your story. Another thing I really liked about your story was the incorporation of the Spotify scans to the songs that went well with the text. One thing that I really love about music is that it can capture emotions in a way that words can’t, almost like playing the sound of how moments and words feel. I think this was a really creative way to capture those feelings.
Kit, I totally didn’t mind the wind in your video, I think you filming this outside went really well with your story, since it’s about ants, so I was more appreciative of it than anything. One thing that I loved about your artist book was your use of a poem in the book rather than just direct quotes from the story. Your presentation was great in that you first read right from your story so we got context, with your poem in the artist book describing the story in a new way. It helped capture the emotions of your story in the small vessel of the artist book. Another thing I loved was your idea to use the accordion style book in a vertical orientation, like moving through the anthill. That was awesome.
Sophie – Woah! You have a very creative eye and clearly spent a lot of time on this. One thing I loved was your cover and how you introduced the wall-paper concept that would follow throughout the book, almost like we were moving through different parts of the house. Another thing I loved was your incorporation of pictures. They didn’t feel plopped in, they felt natural, like they were meant to be there. One thing you didn’t mention in the video that I also noticed was that the hole punches are literally hearts! That is so cute. This story was so emotional and I think it was valuable that you used every page of the story. I love it 🙂
COLE, oh my gosh. I was genuinely laughing throughout this whole video. As soon as I saw the thumbnail with your wearing sunglasses and a tie-dye Weezer shirt I knew it was going to be good. The concept of you being a Youtuber reviewing a movie was a great idea, and I loved your insertion of self-compliments throughout the video… good move, good move. In terms of the reel, I think it was cool that it was set up in frames like your title and there were important scenes that happened throughout the story. Another thing I liked was your drawings, superb. I appreciated the comedic relief of this video during finals week, especially in contrast with the heaviness of the story.
Scott, I think the way that you framed your book out was a really good way of telling your short story in a simple yet creative way. I liked where you started the artist book, at the turning point where their identity is broadcasted on the news, along with their car. My favorite part of the artist book was the crossroads at the ending. At first, I didn’t think much of them. I thought it went well with the theme of the book, but didn’t see beyond that. But when you explained that it was meant to signify a non-permanent reunion, symbolizing that they would both have to stop at the crossroads but inevitably drive off in directions, I just thought that was an amazing connection.
Teresa, I immediately liked how you used incorporated the key colors that represented the characters throughout the story in the coloring of your title. It was a good way of introducing the theme that would persist throughout the different pages of the importance of color. I also loved the repetition of the importance of the color blue and blue eyes. And finally, your drawings were really cool. I know you said you “can’t art,” but you definitely can, and they added a lot to your book. 🙂
Hi Bridget! I really like the cover of your book and the celestial theme you have. I really liked going over your story in class, so seeing it turned into an artist book is really cool! It’s also neat that you included spotify codes for the vibes of your story. I feel like it really helps people connect to the material and it’s just nice to see what people listen to when they write!
Hi Kit! The ant-hill idea is super cool and so creative! I loved this story and I feel like your book is something that Argyle would create herself. I also enjoyed the section that you ended up reading. I feel like it really encapsulates the heart of Argyle’s personality and narrative. Your poem was really well-written too!
Hi Sophie! Your book is so neat and well-crafted! I appreciate how much thought and time you seemed to put into it, especially since you based the aesthetics around how the family’s home would look like. I like how you included your entire story and the reason behind it. I agree that it does feel like a short story you’d find in a little book.
Hi Cole! Your video was so fun and creative! Your project fits in so well with your story, especially as it acts as a “story board” of events. I also appreciated how much time and effort each of the Act cannisters must have taken.
Hi Scott! You have such a unique approach to your book. I really like how you focused on Boston’s personality/identity through objects. I also feel like we get a lot more information regarding Boston and his father’s relationship, which was cool to see! The crossroads part of your book was really thoughtful and well done!
Hi Teresa! I really liked how you only used four colors throughout the book. It’s a simple theme, but it’s really effective and I feel like it goes along with your story. I also appreciated how you wrote out the story instead of just printing it out. It makes the book and the love story feel a lot more personal and private to the characters. Great job!
Bridget, I really liked how simple your artist book was, specifically the pictures. They were small and simple yet they held a meaning behind each one that went along to the selected passages. I also really liked the incorporation of the spotify song QR code that displayed a song dedicated to that particular section of the story.
Kit, I really liked that the artist book was made by using a poem instead of excerpts from your story itself. The idea that the poem was to be the voice and emotions of the main character was a wonderful idea. I also really liked how you designed the pages of the book to fit the theme by making it sort of like an ant farm.
Sophie, I really liked how you made the book to be designed like the interior of the house. Like how you imagined a house like theirs would be decorated. I also really liked how you digitally designed the scene skips with the bunny to represent Pistachio, as he is the reason behind the title of the story.
Cole, I really liked how you pretended to be someone reviewing the story as if it was a real movie, even though the plot of the movie was a film, but still, I loved it. I also really liked how the book itself was like the film or like a storyboard of the movie. That was amazing. I rate the movie 5 stars.
Scott, I really liked how you ended your video by saying how you can really know who a person is just by looking at their keychains and what they carry with themselves on their key rings. I also really liked how you incorporated that into your book through what Boston keeps on his keys as a way of showing this is who he is, specifically with keeping the note with his dad’s address so he can be reminded of who is.